I'm basically going for the brute, bodyguard type. Skilled and instinctually capable. Abundantly loyal.
Warf - Star Trek: The Next Generation
Ka D'Argo from Farscape
Dinobot from Beast Wars
Showing posts with label story. Show all posts
Showing posts with label story. Show all posts
Tuesday, October 30, 2012
Dave Yee Crit
Hey group,
Please be sure to read this before our meeting tonight. That way we can save some time and spend more time on other things.
This is the crit from Yee:
Set up Tahama's attitude immediately as violent and impatient.
Close up shots for climbing sap, and show where they're getting the sap from.
- The sap shows a foreign way of climbing. Emphasize that Alex and Nadia aren't experienced with the sap.
Whenever there's a POV shot, have a reaction shot after. ex. Nadia looking up at the waterfall.
Don't have Alex turn around while talking to Nadia. Find another form of acting to show his lack of caring.
Have Tahama tell Alex to head over toward the waterfall, and have Alex notice and come back when he sees Tahama grabbing Nadia's hair.
Have Nadia and Tahama fight more before he grabs her hair.
When Tahama scowls at Nadia, show close up of Tahama's face.
Economize shots when Tahama let's go of Nadia.
Show wide shot of owls flying.
Be sure to show everyone's reaction to owls, including Mokarita.
End with her putting sap on, not talking to Mokarita.
I pretty much agree with most of this, if not all of it. Aside from other crits, this is at least what you can expect for Friday.
Please be sure to read this before our meeting tonight. That way we can save some time and spend more time on other things.
This is the crit from Yee:
Set up Tahama's attitude immediately as violent and impatient.
Close up shots for climbing sap, and show where they're getting the sap from.
- The sap shows a foreign way of climbing. Emphasize that Alex and Nadia aren't experienced with the sap.
Whenever there's a POV shot, have a reaction shot after. ex. Nadia looking up at the waterfall.
Don't have Alex turn around while talking to Nadia. Find another form of acting to show his lack of caring.
Have Tahama tell Alex to head over toward the waterfall, and have Alex notice and come back when he sees Tahama grabbing Nadia's hair.
Have Nadia and Tahama fight more before he grabs her hair.
When Tahama scowls at Nadia, show close up of Tahama's face.
Economize shots when Tahama let's go of Nadia.
Show wide shot of owls flying.
Be sure to show everyone's reaction to owls, including Mokarita.
End with her putting sap on, not talking to Mokarita.
I pretty much agree with most of this, if not all of it. Aside from other crits, this is at least what you can expect for Friday.
Monday, October 29, 2012
SCRUFF MGUFF These Boards are still RUFF
Hey all,
I've addressed some of the issues that have been mentioned. There were a few suggestions about deep space that still need to be resolved, and thats why I proclaim these to still be JUST IDEAS. These are totes still rough.
I'm still in the middle of addressing some revisions, but since I need to switch over the Team 5's boards for the rest of tonight, I figure I'd post my progress now.
I look forward to hearing how I can make these better!
Mike
I've addressed some of the issues that have been mentioned. There were a few suggestions about deep space that still need to be resolved, and thats why I proclaim these to still be JUST IDEAS. These are totes still rough.
I'm still in the middle of addressing some revisions, but since I need to switch over the Team 5's boards for the rest of tonight, I figure I'd post my progress now.
I look forward to hearing how I can make these better!
Mike
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